Your article is very detailed and the story is thought out. However, you do need to include quotations from witnesses. I like your ending paragraph (it shows that you have thought of further action). Your lead paragraph should be concise and explain who, what, where, when in 1-2 sentences.
Your article is very detailed and the story is thought out. However, you do need to include quotations from witnesses. I like your ending paragraph (it shows that you have thought of further action). Your lead paragraph should be concise and explain who, what, where, when in 1-2 sentences.
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